Date: 17 sept 2008, 12:00 noon
I think i haven told you all abt my first assignment essay results... nah, i got only a pass... but i no my language really not that good. But after i see my paper when i got them back and listen to his defination of a good n bad sentences, we all darm pissed off by him. BTW, he also didn mark my paper like that, because my assignment is just as clean as the one that have handed him. Basically, he just see the pages, no editing other then the reference quoting which he teach mi is wrong. Then behind put: 'an average essay, need to personalise' and the referencing part put 'good'.
He is saying that a good essay is not only stating but also elaboration on the sentences example:
Weak sentences:
We must apply the Johari Window to improve communications.
Strong sentences:
We can use the Johari window questionair so that people are aware of their communication style. With this knowleadge, they are able to communicate better with each other especially their junior staff......and so on.
I have told you all our essay word limit is 1000 words. Erm 1000 words wanna ask to beat around the bushes writing... i am not that fantastic lo. Then still got one more on one... in his/her conclusion, they put like: 'in the morning glory shines up .....' like writing a poem or story like that those very very flowerey language. He say that is a strong one (sure agree because he/she is able to include additional sentences inside the 1000 words limit)!
Well, i got not much to say la, since he like the flowers so much. Not that i not agree with what he have teach use, but just we feel that it is not answering to the point and i don even know that my australia marker who sees our paper (if we write till like that) are wondering we are writing a story book out or we are writing a undergrad essay. If he wanna mi to write till like that i sure can do that in the exam when there is no word limit control (but got time limit).
We are commenting on his way of writing from the start of his lecturer till the end... (quite loudly) and we almost wanna throw stuff down on him.... (haha, just joking... we only wanna leave his lecture, if not this is the last lecture, i will not stay)
